Friday, November 21, 2014

Milf Yuri 2 Retrospective

So I haven't been perfect with my schedule, but I figure it's better than it used to be.  Anyway, this is the second half of the Milf Yuri set.  It just continues the story, and concludes it.  These aren't much different from the first ones, just more strapon action, I guess. 

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The fourth page gets the strapon out, and basically focuses on the strapon fetish.  I know I use this fetish a lot, but honestly, I think it's one that people like, and hey, there's a strapon in the picture, so it's a bit straightforward there.  I also don't think I've ever really described ffm with strapons before.  I mentioned it in some of the position pages, but I don't think I ever did a narrative for it.  Well, this isn't much of a narrative, but at least that fetish is represented somewhere.  Most of these vignettes are supposed to be putting an image in the reader's head, but this particular set does that a bit more than the others, I think.  At least, it does it more than the stuff that I've been releasing lately, which, to be honest, has been pretty dry.  The narratives are something that I can definitely see myself getting better at, the more I do them.  I like that I presented 2 different scenarios here, and that I didn't over-detail anything. 
Writing captions is actually really different from writing normal erofics.  In an erofic, you have to describe a lot of shit, the appearance of the characters, the setting, everything.  In a caption, all the description is done for you, and all you have to do is tell a little story, give the characters some character, basically, expand upon the picture.  The picture is the framework, the text presents some background, and leads the reader in a general direction, and their brain fills in the rest.  This means that you, as the caption writer, have to limit the amount of detail that you put in, to allow for the reader to craft his own specific fantasy.  You point him in a direction, you don't take his hand and lead him to where you think he wants to go.  It's totally different from erofic, and it's easy to screw it up.  I think working within 640x400 has been a real boon for me, and I suggest that anyone making captions limit themselves to a specific resolution, to keep themselves from going too overboard with description.

The fifth page is a bit of a voyeur fantasy, I think.  I really like the way that I segued from the milf yuri, to the /ss/.  It's pretty seamless in this one, or at least, more seamless than the others.  At this point, by the way, the reader is supposed to come.  The next page isn't particularly sexual.  This is a bit of a tough spot for me as a writer.  I can't be in the bedrooms of the people reading this, so I don't know how they use my material.  The thing is, the boy 'showered them with cum' in the last page, so the boy coming here doesn't really signal anything. 
In video porn, the director probably knows where the viewer is going to cum.  That point is set up, it's the climax of the scene.  The man is standing tall over the woman, jerking off like a madman, as she kneels there with her tongue out.  Straightforward, and easy.  This is a pretty clear signal to the viewer, that says, 'it's time to come now'.  Alternatively, in a creampie video, the man will thrust hard and deep, and start groaning or something.  Again, clear signal.  Even in a solo video, when the woman starts moaning, that's a signal to the viewer, to let go, and enjoy himself. 
Here, though, it's difficult to give those signals.  I tried to in this one, writing the boy, essentially, as a reader avatar.  You, the reader, are just like the boy here, watching these two women have sex, imagining yourself with them, closing your eyes, and enjoying yourself.  The issue, though, is that there's still one more page.  You, the reader, probably know this, and so, you might hold yourself back, believing that something even sexier lies just on the next page.  Unfortunately, the next page is just an outro.  There's no sex at all.  It comes off as a bit of a cocktease, which isn't what I want.  I'm going to have to work on that issue. 

The sixth page is my outro.  Not sexual, as I said, but it does expand the plot of the story, and conclude it.  It's a bit of a difficult balance, story and sex.  This one actually has a better story to sex ratio than the Nerd Girl special, but, unlike the Nerd Girl special, the sex here ends very abruptly.  In the Nerd Girl special, you had sex right up until the end, so the reader could realistically fap all the way through the special, and then come right at the end.  Nice and easy.  Here, though, the reader might end up losing his arousal from the final page, and being left frustrated.  It's sloppy writing from an erofic perspective, and it's something that I need to keep in mind, so that I don't make this mistake again. 
The text itself is basically just more 'acolyte program is a good thing' stuff, which is great for story, although it somewhat restates things.  The real thing that I wanted to do, though, was conclude the story.  It had to be given a conclusion, where the lover decides to go and fuck some acolytes, but it's difficult to decide exactly how to do that, while still titillating the reader.  Again, it's something I'll have to think about.

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I'm writing this in between getting ready for work, and one of the things that came to mind while I was cooking breakfast, was how I think people enjoy my material.  My stuff mostly comes in 2 flavors.  Guide, and Narrative.  Sometimes the two overlap, like in the Hooker Exploration special, and to some degree, this special, but mostly, it's one or the other.  Now, I believe, that people fap in 2 different ways, when it comes to 1D and 2D, and this is mostly just because hands are required to advance the story.  Generally, you have to either click, or turn a page, or something, which can take you out of the moment. 
So with 1/2D, you either fap to it, or with it.  Fapping with something, to me, means that you are looking directly at it, while you fap, and while you cum.  Maybe you'll close your eyes intermittently, but for the most part, those pictures are what's getting you off.  The story complements the picture, but it's mostly the picture that you're thinking about.  This is how most people use videos. 
Fapping to something, on the other end, is a mostly mental experience.  You read the story or caption, maybe touching yourself lightly, and it arouses you in general.  You then go and fap, and either close your eyes and imagine a scenario along the lines of what was in the story, or look at some porn, and apply the ideas of the story to the porn that you're watching or looking at.  You're using the ideas, but you're not fapping directly to that specific piece of content. 
So how does this apply to my work?  Basically, the guides, in my mind, are something that is fapped to, while the narratives, are fapped with.  Obviously, I could be wrong, since I'm not in your rooms, watching you fap.  For all I know, you guys enjoy this stuff on a purely academic level. 
But assuming that this is how people enjoy my work, I have to keep these things in mind when I'm writing.  I can't put too much story in a narrative, because people aren't really there for the story, they're there for the sex, and while there is a picture, the story needs to compliment the picture, and not oppose it.  Too much thinking can 'de-rouse' people, and that is not what I want.  With narratives, the sex has to be front and center, and there needs to be sex on every page.  In narratives, you are selling a very specific fantasy, so you need to provide a lot of sexual content yourself.  More specifics, less setting, less story, and keep the sex constant.
On the other end, though, the guides aren't something that people are generally going to be fapping with.  The pictures are there to arouse, and the text is there to provide a setting and a framework, for the reader to craft his own story, after reading the entire guide.  Maybe he faps with the pictures, maybe not, but the important thing is that the pictures are arousing enough to make him want to see the next one, and that they complement the text, so that you're not just slapping unrelated pics on the text.  The pictures and text should work together, to help the reader form a better picture in his mind, which he will then use to form a scenario, which he then faps to.  It's slightly complicated, but the important thing to remember is that in guides, the setting is the story, and the specific fantasy is something that the reader creates for himself, based on the world that you have given him.  More story, more setting, less specifics. 

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Wow, that was a lot of writing, but I think it's something that I needed to work out, because I have seen myself floundering at times, trying to figure out how much sex should go where, and what the story to sex ratios should be for narratives vs. guides.  At some point, I plan to collate all of this caption info into a blog post, and possibly an infographic.  I see so many bad captions, and really, writing these is a lot of fun, and I think that anyone can do it.  At most, you're only really ever writing 1500 characters (characters, not words) per caption.  I think a lot of people are put off by all the shitty captions, that they just never try.  I sometimes worry about that, but for the most part, people seem to be very happy with the stuff that I do.  I guess only time will tell if that continues.

Next up is the 'femped professions' block, from the Timid Boys pamphlet.  They're not formatted yet, but I've picked out pictures, so they should be pretty easy to make.  After that is the Bedroom Bukkake set, and then the TimBoy Dating block.  I think I'll make time this weekend to write at least 2 of the Hooker Birthday Expansion/Redux pages. 

1 comment:

  1. I love how you describe the uh...mechanics of creating fapping material. Yes, if you've never tried it, writing 'useful' erotic dialog is a lot harder than it seems. You have to delve into the psychology of the reader and hope you don't come back with sticky fingers. :)
    Jokes aside, it will not be possible to please every person. Each will come to your work with different expectations. Some have criticized my rewritten mangas for being to wordy, suggesting that 'real people don't talk that much when screwing.' That may be true but it is also not relevant. These are fantasies, tools for sexual arousal. If you can slip some desired subliminal information into the person's mind during the moment of peak sexual arousal so much the better. ;) Come for the perverted, incestuous, pedo sex and stay for the brainwashing! I've experimented with poetic techniques, alliteration, onomatopoeia, font type, and font size. Not everyone will like what I do but at least it keeps ME creatively interested in what I am doing which is critical. I felt that lezzie sex, what you call Yuri has some dark roots in the male. A way of playing safely with that dark fear/suspicion that women don't really need men to get off. Add the imagry of fully mature voluptuous milfs licking, mauling, and generally enjoying each other's fleshy, creamy bodies as in the Joy Pop pics and you have an excellent work table to burrow into the male psyche. I'm sure the little acolytes in your game story would appreciate their efforts.
    Thank you for clarifiying the basic nature of the planned end of your game. I agree that a black comedy approach is probably the best. Many of the issues your game deals with are rather unfunny serious life/death issues in the real world, so it's best to deal with them in a somewhat innocent comic format to avoid turning off your audience. Good luck but as they say 'Dying is easy, comedy is hard. LOL
    BTW Long ago I attempted to write a comprehensive short story detailing the 'tragic conflict' in my own universe but it got a little too dark for my tastes and I stopped writing it halfway through. I doubt if I'll ever finish it especially since net censorship rules have tightened. But perhaps it may give you some useful ideas. I've posted it on my Mega site if you're interested. It's called The Deflowering, in reference to the loss of innocence of a femboy and the Femin Coven in general when they must do the 'deed' to humanity. Also I think the Whore of Babylon image for your Medea Kali is great. Perhaps you can play with that if it doesn't mess with your Jehovan sentiments.
    As before the password for the zips are iamanadult and the site is:
    https://mega.co.nz/#F!2pIhgaSQ!0Kvcu6-x6Z-M6huf3JDyTg

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