Saturday, December 13, 2014

Hooker Birthday/Nun Lifestyle 2 Retrospective

These were a bit of a mixed bag.  The Good Boy (Chaz) pictures were a little bit difficult to rewrite, since the original text ended up spanning both pictures.  It's a lot easier when you're writing a whole piece, and not incorporating pre-written material, into new material.  It's just easier to keep a consistent voice, when you're doing it all in one shot.
The Outdoor Sex pictures (Elliot) were substantially easier to write, since I was doing it all at once.  I wrote a bit too much, though, for that one.  Most of the sex ends up in small font.

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The first page of the Good Boy set is the new picture, which isn't really that common with these.  I suppose I could have made it the second picture, and had them fuck twice, but the titjob as foreplay seemed to make much more sense.  Unfortunately, I wasn't actually able to change much in this page.  It's almost all setup, and I wasn't able to describe the titfuck beyond just a few lines.  I probably could have taken out the bit about her 'knowing that he'd be hooked', and used that to describe the titfuck in more detail.  I think it turned out okay, overall, though.

The second page, while being an old picture, actually has a lot of new text.  Most of the new text is describing the sex, essentially painting the boy as being ridiculously horny, and fucking the Nun like a wild animal.  It's mostly just an expansion of the original story, more detail, nothing really changed.  I like the mental picture of the boy humping her like mad, trying to fuck her, but being too obsessed with her tits to actually reach down and get his cock in.  To me, it calls up memories of the gifs in those old 'zooskool' swf's.
Oh by the way, a lot of my work here was very much inspired by those.  They cover a lot of the same ground that my stuff does, and do it in a similar way, as well.  Replace 'petlove' with 'childlove' and 'your dog' with 'your son', and you would probably end up with something very, very, similar to what I've written.  They're also similar to what the fempeds, themselves, put out.  There's probably pages upon pages that could be written on that, but I'll leave it there for now.

The first page of the Outdoor Sex set starts off by setting up the story, and reminding the reader that this Nun is also a prostitute.  It's not really necessary, but I do it anyway.  At the very least, it shows that the Lilians are okay with prostitution among their female population.  It also shows that 'Nun' is not a full time job.  The setup also presents the nun as being a bit predatory, which we probably already knew, but it's good to show it again.
So she loses the boy, and decides to get herself off, instead.  This part is sexual, but from a voyeur/exhibitionist sort of angle.  It's not a particularly odd fetish, and I've used it before, in the Yuri Milf special.
A word on the picture, it's actually a couple of different pictures.  There was one pic where she's peeing, and one where her eyes were closed.  The one where her eyes were closed featured the boy with his cock out, while the one where she's looking at the porn features the boy with his cock out, but he's obscured by the grass.  I scrapped the pissing pic, and combined the others to make the pic that I used.
I considered having a little line about how she keeps a Lilian porno mag in her bag to share with her clients, but I decided against it, mostly because it would take up too much space.  I guess the understanding is that she's just so perverted, she has to keep a porno mag with her at all times.  

The second page is a bit of a shameful display, font-wise.  I wasn't able to stick to a character limit, and so, I had to bring all of the sex down to like 12 or 13 pt, which sucks.  The boy gets a name here, and the sex shifts from exhibition/voyeur, to mutual masturbation.  After they enjoy the magazines, the sex starts.  The Nun talks a bit about the magazines, how they're designed to teach boys how to have sex, and all that.  I think I talk about that a little bit in another one of the Nun Lifestyle sets, but it's more about pamphlets than the magazines.  Just more backstory about the Temple overall.  It gives the standard 'good ending', and that's it.
This set doesn't really give a huge amount of story, but it does sort of shed some light on a few little recruiting practices that the Lilians use.  The Nun probably wouldn't really be aiming to fuck that boy, and she certainly wouldn't pop out of the bushes and rape him, but she probably would have at least had a bit of a discussion with him, gauged his interest in sex, and maybe left a few magazines with him, along with her phone number.  Of course, he started jerking off while watching her masturbate, so obviously, the plan was cranked up about 4 notches.

I am running into a slight issue with these, in light of the Timid Boys Pamphlet.  They don't match up.  The narrative is slightly inconsistent, and while it's much more obvious here, because I'm releasing them side by side, it might still end up being obvious to the average reader, when they aren't side by side.  The Nun is described as knowing all of the boys in the Hooker Birthday special, some from their birth, but there isn't a whole lot of discussion about her relationship with them, or exactly how much she's shown/told them.  Would they know that she's a hooker?  Do 10 year olds know what a hooker is?  I guess it probably depends on the 10 year old.  At any rate, I should probably keep the overall narrative in mind when I write things like this in the future.  Less 'meet and fuck' stuff would probably be good, or at least, mention previous contact. 

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I know I fucked up with the schedule again this week.  I've been working on Taisen, though, putting in a new ending, and adding the 'new fap shit' audio files.  I'm thinking that I'm almost done with it.  All I need at this point, is a new title card, and I think that's it.  I'll need to bugtest a bit, and test my release package on a virgin computer, but beyond that, I'm done.  I think I'll be able to release by next Wednesday.  After that, I can start preliminary work on Joobachi. 
Next up is the Timid Boys Home Visit 2, and then the Video Ads 3, and then Hooker Birthday/Nun Lifestyle 3.  I'll be starting up writing for the Timid Boys pamphlet again, I'm right after the Art Film, which is where the sex really starts.  So it'll be a lot of sex guide stuff.  After that's done, I'll assemble the Sister's Specials, and then take account of what I have for the magazines, and what I need.  Once that's done, I'll start writing for the Mommy Bubble pamphlet.  

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