Wednesday, March 18, 2015

Timid Boys pamphlet Orgy block and Outro Retrospective

Jesus, that was a long title.  Anyway, this marks the end of the Timid Boys pamphlet, which is nice.  I did like this pamphlet a lot, and I feel like it's one of my better ones.  Not the best, but good.  Decent, at least.

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The first page features a picture from the same artist (I think) that did the domination foot and chain pics.  He's a personal favorite of mine, and I like what he did with the picture here.  I wish that I had the GIMP skills to erase and relabel the 'mother's day' sign, but I don't.  I like that the milves here are of varied hair colors and lengths, but I kind of wish there had been a brown one in there somewhere.  Personal preference.  A couple of different body builds would have been nice, too.  They don't have sameface, which is good, but the bodies are basically just the stereotype of western beauty.  I get that people like it, but I think one or 2 plump women would have made this slightly more interesting to look at. 
The text is largely just an intro the Orgy block.  It does go through a bit of story, though, saying that there are 'newbie' orgies, specially designed for new converts.  I feel like the bit about 'introduce to polyamoury in a fun and controlled environment' was also said, word for word, in the FFM block, which sucks, but whatever.  This text block ends kind of abruptly, and I wish I'd been able to say more, but the nature of orgy pics is that they're very dependent on resolution, and you can't cut too much out of them.  You'll see what I mean later. 

The second page features a rare lolicon picture!  Woo!  Celebrate!  This is another one from a great artist, whose name escapes me at the moment.  Abubu, perhaps?   a a a a ?  Agata?  There's so many whose names start with "A".  The older looking boy on the left isn't someone that I really wanted in the picture, but I didn't see an easy way to crop him out without sacrificing too many other good elements, so I just let it go.  Whatever, he's just more developed.  There is a very nice variety of different body types, and skin/hair colors, though, which is nice.
The text here continues quite linearly from the last page.  Again, there was a lot more that I wanted to say, but you can't squash those pictures down too much, or you'll end up with something that's totally unviewable.  It's not like the 1on1 sex scenes.  You'll really see what I mean in the next picture.

The third page has a whole lot going on.  Now, I think you see what I mean about resolution being important.  There's a lot of detail in this picture, and that detail can be lost entirely during the resampling and indexing processes.  I'll provide the original here, so that you can look at how much detail was lost.  It really is a tragedy.  But anyway, I like the picture here a lot.  The art style is a bit hit or miss, but there's just so much going on here, that it kind of makes up for it.  It's definitely the best picture for the text.
The text wraps up the orgy block, and, again, continues in a linear fashion.  The text gives a bit of explanation about the holiday orgies, establishes that the nuns do have some level of oversight, and discusses, for the second or third time in this pamphlet, the idea of 'bad lilians'.  I've saved the discussion of them for last, and that was (somewhat) by design.
For a while, I wasn't sure exactly how to broach the topic of bad Lilians, and the limits that the Lilians actually impose on themselves.  I'll be going into this in greater detail in the Mommy Bubble pamphlet, but suffice to say, although the Lilians are super into BDSM, and although they do consider males to be property, they do have limits, and they do have values.  In the earlier, more propaganda-esque stuff, I glossed over it, which was the right choice, I think.  Propaganda doesn't go into the issues.  But right now, I'm writing more internal stuff, things that would be passed around between people (women) who were already ingrained in the Lilian culture.  It wouldn't really be telling them things that they don't already know.  At any rate, I like the way that it's coming out.  I've been trying to look at my project as a whole, which is difficult, because it's like 120 pages (8x11/12ptArial/single-spaced) now, but I feel that, as a whole, there is an overarching theme, and that these last, internal, propaganda pieces, really do round things out quite well. 

I don't know why I wrote all that, as if I'm done discussing the pamphlet.

The fourth page features a much more tame picture than the last 10 or so.  It comes from Kancolle, which I don't play, have never played, and don't ever plan to play, although I've used their porn quite a bit.  There were other, probably better, pictures that I could have used, and this one, honestly, isn't that great, but I liked it, and wanted to include it.  I just think it's cute. 
The text is somewhat cathartic, or at least, it's meant to be.  I like that I referred to the boy as a 'baby lilian', I just think it's a cute way to say it.  The text here is something of a 'pre-outro'.  It goes through a bit of a retrospective, and mirrors the intro in quite a few places.  Honestly, I could have ended it on this page, and it would have been fine.  I really like this page. 

The fifth page, honestly, is a bit unnecessary, but I did it anyway, for the sake of completion.  There's no real picture, so I'll focus on the text, instead.
The text here was something that I put quite a bit of thought into.  It essentially goes through the (canonical) reasons why I haven't actually done as much work on listing off ways to recruit the other boys.  The real reason, of course, is that I don't want to repeat myself too much in these, but it's nice to have a storyline reason. 
Basically, I say that the other boys don't actually stick with the Temple for very long.  This provides a canonical explanation for the question of "what happens when these boys grow up", which is, they move on.  The Timid Boys, however, do not.  This page more or less just discusses them, and talks about how awesome Jenni thinks that they are.  It goes into some of the more religious stuff, as well, which is something that I like putting in, especially when Jenni's  "on screen".  I want her to seem much more fervently theological than her contemporaries.  It also canonizes the idea that the other boys get recruited more often.  I wanted to put in a little blurb about how the other boys are easier and safer to recruit, but I ended up running out of space.  I think I said enough about that, though, in the earlier pages. 
Overall, I feel like this page, while pretty unnecessary, does contribute to the overall story, which is why I'm keeping it in.  But really, the last (4th) page is enough of an outro. 

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So that's it for the Timid Boys pamphlet.  I feel like I did a good job on it.  It's a very slow burn, but I think that it adds a lot to the overall storyline, and deserves a place in the canon.  If I could do things differently, I would have tried to inject more sexual stuff into the earlier chapters, but that's really difficult to do, while still maintaining realism. 
Overall, looking at the entire pamphlet, I'm counting 26 somewhat explicit or sexual pictures, but only 17 or 18 sexually explicit pages.  That's out of 46 total.  It's not quite perfect, and there was a lot of nonsexual, or mildly sexual content in this pamphlet, but I guess it comes with the territory.  This was designed to be more of a romance novel, or at least notes for a romance novel, and so, much of it is focused on the leadup to sex, and not the act itself.  
I feel like it could have been balanced better, but at the same time, I also feel like I did a decent job, considering the subject matter.  I guess I have mixed feelings about this pamphlet.

At any rate, it's available for direct download, so you guys can look at it in its entirety, and (probably not) share your thoughts. 

http://www.mediafire.com/download/l7jw1a4gmch3uc5/Timid.rar

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